Assignment 4.1 – Thu Vo’s Peer Review of Application Package Draft for Samuel Kobierski

TO:              Samuel Kobierski, Member of team The TechniWriters, English 301 99C course

FROM:        Thu Vo, Member of team The TechniWriters, English 301 99C course T.V.

DATE:          March 28^th, 2019

SUBJECT:   301 Peer Review, Assignment 4.1 Job Application Package Draft for Samuel Kobierski

Dear Samuel, thank you for submitting your application package draft for assignment 4.1. Your peer review for the application package, including a job posting, resume, cover letter and reference request letters, is completed. It includes overall impressions and detailed notes for each element of the package. Your questions are welcomed.

Overall impression:

You have an overall strong application package with a professional tone throughout. The design of your resume and cover letter is very impressive – they definitely stand out from the standard format. However, they might be too sophisticated comparing to the format and layout of the examples provided in the text book Technical Communications. There are very few grammatical errors and the writing is usually concise and to-the-point. It might be beneficial to elaborate more on your skills or experiences to showcase yourself better to the potential employers.

Job Advertisement

Good work in choosing a job posting that is current and relevant to your career with a proper citation being added.

Resume

• Contact information: You did a good job in including your contact information in a clear and straightforward manner. It would be ideal to be more specific when mentioning your address, as per the instruction in the textbook Technical Communications.
• Career objective: You have successfully mentioned your employment goal at the very beginning of the resume, which is eye-catching to the prospective employer. As the job posting mentioned three different positions, it would be beneficial to have a more specific objective in your resume that corresponds to whichever position you are interested in.
• Education section: Great job!
• Work experience: The work experience you provided are well chosen – they are all closely related to the job posting. Good work listing the most recent jobs first and includes job-specific skills.
• Personal section: You have provided the certificates, awards, and software that are closely related to the job and can attract the prospective employer’s attention.

Cover Letter

• Format: Your letters look clean and neat. It is interesting to have the same design for both your resume and cover letter, but it can be a bit distracting as the letter’s content should be the main attracting point. Be sure to add your signature in the end to make your cover letter more professional.
• Content: Your introduction was brief and to-the-point and the conclusion was successful in restating your interest. You did a great job in mentioning your skills, technical experiences and interpersonal aspects in the body paragraphs – this gives a well-rounded image of yourself to the potential employer. It might be ideal to elaborate on your experiences rather than just listing the skills, which have been previously mentioned in your resume.

Reference Request Letters

• Format: Your letters look clean and neat. Be sure to add your signature in the letters to make them more professional.
• Content: Your introduction was brief and to-the-point and the conclusion was successful in restating your interest. In the body paragraphs, it will be more beneficial to mention specific qualities and skills of yours that you would like your references to mention to the potential employer.

It has been a pleasure reviewing your work. Please contact me if you have any question.

Link to Samuel Kobierski’s Application Package Draft