Monthly Archives: October 2016

Unit 2 was a great learning process. I had an opportunity to find out more about the use of LinkedIn as a professional networking medium, although I have been using LinkedIn for several years now. I have taken my peer reviewer, Shervin’s suggestions into considerations and made some minor changes to my profile. For instance, re-reading and fixing grammatical errors of the job descriptions. I have also used LinkedIn for researching companies and finding more in-depth about their job application process. I become more aware of the global trends by joining groups and following up on the companies of my interest.

I did not encounter any challenges when brainstorming a topic, as I already knew the main issue of my current residence. However, I struggled to come up with an outline of how to raise awareness of the problem, which could then cause residents to partake in action and alleviate food waste generation. I realized measuring the improvements in food waste reduction amongst the whole Arbutus Ponderosa residents were unfeasible and impractical. The solution that I came up with was selecting a 1 to 2 focus groups and going on an on-site observation to see if there are any improvements made to their sorting out food scraps habits before and after the event. Although it is more labour-intensive, this is a more realistic way of measuring the results of food waste reduction project.

The peer review was a very useful way of improving my writing styles. I need to keep in mind that the intended audience might not share the same background and experiences. I also believe writing a peer review also gives me an opportunity to critique my own style of writing. Overall, I have learned the significance of peer reviewing by exchanging suggestions and recommendations amongst the group members.

Enclosure

Revised Proposal: 301 – Diana Choi – Revised Formal Report

URL for Peer Review: http://engl301.arts.ubc.ca/2016/10/08/assignment-2-1-peer-review-for-diana-choi/

Original Writing:

During the process of writing the definitions of my terminology “social space”, I have faced several challenges. For instance, I was uncertain about where to begin with when explaining the term since our audience was to write for “non-technical” readers. The term I chose had a complex concept with many layers to deconstruct. However, with the guidance of our readings, it demonstrated how the terminology can be explained by first providing a Parenthetical, a Sentence Definition, and then moving onto the deeper meaning of the term. I tried to come up with examples that the reader can easily visualize and get an overview of what the term “social space” means.

Peer Review:

Reviewing Gary Tam’s peer review of my definitions gave me an insight on what other ways I could approach and provide a clearer meaning of the term “social space”. One of the aspects Gary struggled was interpreting the diagram of the Social Space. I realized the diagram (visual) and the explanation of the diagram were not detailed enough to offer him an understanding of the concept. Gary has also pointed out the example I used wouldn’t be applicable to those who do not study at UBC thus, using the acronym UBC would be meaningless to other readers.

Editing the Original Writing:

When re-writing and editing the old draft of the definitions, I took considerations of what Gary had suggested. I made sure all the examples I provided were relevant and applicable to readers who do not attend the University of British Columbia. I have also paid more attention to grammatical and spelling errors to improve the coherence of the writing.

The overall of the Unit One helped me become aware of how to deliver information in an organized and straightforward way. It is crucial to take the readers’ educational backgrounds, age, and other factors into considerations to convey information in an effective manner. As an author, writing professionally does not mean writing with no grammatical or spelling errors but be consistent and be wary of unnecessary information.

I have attached the rewritten definition assignment: 301 Diana Choi Definitions

I have also attached the peer review of my definition, which can be accessed here.