Assignment 2:1 – Peer Review of Alicia Degelder’s Formal Report Proposal

Reviewer: Dakota Tryhuba

Author’s name: Alicia Degelder

Date: Feb 4, 2019

Subject: Research Proposal Peer Review

Thank you for submitting your research proposal for identifying rates of job burnout in hospital staff and establishing coping mechanisms. You provided a good overview of an interesting topic that could use further research and clearly described your intended audience, problem, and proposed solution. Here are my thoughts and recommendations:

• Introduction: You provided a solid definition of job burnout. However, a minor suggestion: you can refine your definition further to avoid wordiness and repetition of the word “described” in your definition. For example:

Original: “Job burnout is described as a specific type of work-related stress that can be described as a state of physical or emotional  exhaustion.”

Revision: “Job burnout is a specific type of work-related stress characterized by a state of physical or emotional exhaustion.”

• Statement of Problem: You provide a good summary of the issues associated with job burnout. I would only suggest that you take out the word “by” in your first sentence.
• Proposed solution: Well-thought initial solutions.
• Scope: Your areas of inquiry are well-thought out and important questions that will guide the reader through your report.
• Methods: For your methods, I would condense your section into one or two more detailed sentences rather than four choppy sentences. For example:

Original: “Primary sources will include healthcare employees”. – Including what exactly?

Revision: “The primary sources of data for my report will include creating a survey that examines the eight areas of inquiry defined above and then contacting local healthcare employees via email to conduct anonymously.”

• Qualifications: You did a great job of describing your qualifications by highlighting your past research experience and current work experience as your major qualifications.
• Conclusion: Nice summary of your topic proposal.

I hope my recommendations are helpful. The issue and proposed solution were well composed and easy to understand. There were a few choppy sentences that can be expanded with more detail but overall excellent work! I look forward to reading the final report.

https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99c-2018wc/2019/01/27/research-proposal-alicia-degelder/