Peer Review of Madison Davies’ You Attitude Memorandum–Taylor Smith

To: Madison Davies

From: Taylor Smith

Date: March 11, 2019

Subject: Peer Review of You Attitude Assignment

Madison,

You have done a fantastic job in your Email memorandum to Evan Crisp, which explains how to write an Email professionally while expressing a “You Attitude” throughout. The following is a review of your memorandum, and some added tips that you may choose to apply to your next memorandum to make it even better.

Introduction

• Writing with a “You Attitude” can be tricky at times. Your introduction refers to yourself three times before addressing the reader. Perhaps, try to start your memo with the person’s name, or give them praise on something they did well on. It is important to show the reader that you are coming from a good place and not attacking them in any way.

Writing Style

• You write very well throughout the Email Memorandum, as each column flows into the next.
• Each heading is properly labelled and the order of them works well, making this memorandum easy to follow.

Grammar

• You have proofread your memorandum well, as there are no spelling mistakes or awkward phrases.
• You used professional terminology that was easy to understand, while sounding friendly and welcoming.

You Attitude

• As stated above, perhaps, more use of the “You Attitude” in the Introduction would strengthen your already strong memorandum.
• The body of your memorandum is well thought out, as you avoided the potential risk of the reader feeling like you are talking down to him/her. You do not direct each point at the reader, rather you generalize your points to apply to everyone, rather than just Evan Crisp.

Conclusion

You have done very well in displaying how a professional Email should be written while continually displaying a “You Attitude” throughout it. Overall, the suggestions that I have given you are very minimal, as there was not much that needed strengthening on your memorandum. I hope what I have suggested will help you in the future. If you have any questions please contact me via email at taylor.a.smith199@gmail.com