Defining OCD (Obsessive Compulsive Disorder) in three ways for a general audience is an interesting task to do. Even though most people might have some knowledge of OCD, I found that writing definitions without introducing more complicated jargons can be challenging. To keep it clear but detailed, I provided a parenthetical definition for each term that might not be familiar to the general public. Suggested by my peer, Curtis, I rewrote some of the sentences to avoid awkward wording and eliminate grammatical mistakes.
After reviewing Curtis’s passage, I have learned a lot from his writing. His sentences are very clear and straightforward. I had no problem understanding cryptography which is supposed to be a very complex and broad concept. Then I realized that my writing could be confusing to readers because I tend to write long and run-on sentences. Moreover, I noticed that Curtis’s expanded definition might need a few more examples to illustrate his points better. This reminded me to review my work to see if my explanations and examples are sufficient.
I have learned a lot from this assignment. In the process of writing the definition, I was able to refine my research skills to look for relevant information. My technique of simplifying complex sentences has improved as well. Curtis’s review helped me realize that some of my working and sentences can be confusing. Therefore, I rewrote some of my words to make the whole passage more concise and straightforward.
In conclusion, by reviewing my peers’ work, I can learn from their writing styles as well as the contents. Curtis’s feedback helps me reflect on myself and improve my writing skills.
Here is the peer review of my work: http://engl301.arts.ubc.ca/2017/09/25/peer-review-of-definitions-3/
Here is my updated definitions: Updated Definition of OCD