To: Ayazhan Makhambetova
From: Mahsa Ehtemam
Date: March 5, 2019
Subject: Peer Review for on Writing with “You” Attitude Assignment
It was a pleasure reading your memorandum, which consisted of many great tips and guidelines to be used for professional technical communication. Below are some comments and suggestions for you to consider when editing your assignment.
First Impressions
- Overall the memorandum is both professional yet personable, and is clear to follow.
Organization
- The memorandum body has a clear list with additional notes which are useful
- States the main idea with the detailed example below
- Use of space after each main point or bolding the main points could have helped the organization
Content
- The guidelines and tips provided are extremely helpful and detailed with examples
- Includes step by step guide to writing an email
- Use a consistent formatting guide in your bullet points: are they headers or full sentences?
The Use of Language
- Consider using a style or tone of language that is less authoritative
- Used the writing with a “you” attitude correctly while peer reviewing on the same topic
This memorandum on writing with “you” attitude is very informative and well written. I hope my suggestions are of use to you and help to improve your assignment. Should you have any questions or concerns please do not hesitate to contact me at mahsa_09@hotmail.com.
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