During unit 2, I went through several ideas regarding my workplace that could be investigated for my formal report, including the sanitary standards of the gym, ways to increase sales of memberships, or marketing of the gym on social media. However, the decrease in attendance rate was most relevant to my studies in kinesiology and the prevalent issue of physical inactivity amongst the working class in our society. I had actually drafted a formal report for methods to increase membership sales, which also connected to promoting physical activity amongst women. Unfortunately, the feasibility and data sources would be very limited because 30 Minute Hit is a Franchise, and any changes regarding memberships would require extensive legal consultation and the opinions of all 30MH gyms, which is unattainable for the scope of my report. While preparing to conduct the interviews, I wonder how the findings will be integrated into the formal report. For instance, will I be using the information to justify why my proposed solution is feasible, or am I expected to use their input to illustrate how the rewards system will be constructed?
The formal report outline required preliminary research of 30MH statistics to provide sufficient sources to carry out the research. The writing plan we completed aided my organization of the project and provided me with step-by-step procedures as to how the research will continue to ensure sufficient writing and editing time.
Writing a peer review for my partner’s proposal was useful in comparing our different writing styles and how I can improve the clarity of my writing in future assignments. My partner’s proposal was shorter than mine, but communicated sufficient detail for most of the sections. With technical writing, detail is important but conciseness is key to respect the reader’s busy schedule, and I strive to continue to improve on this aspect. My colleagues’ work on the team forum displayed immense diversity in our interests and professions.
I have not created a Linked In profile prior to English 301 and I was glad for the instructions and peer feedback my peers provided in making sure I had a personal and professional profile. Since a lot of my new connections on Linked In did not have a profile photo, I was initially unaware of the importance of visuals. However, after reading several “best practices” of Linked In, and receiving feedback from my colleague, I promptly added a photo to enhance the effectiveness of my profile. A professional social media network greatly differs from any of the platforms I have used for connections, but I find that it is meaningful to showcase your accomplishments and work or academic intentions in a professional manner.
Attachment of the revised proposal: Revised Proposal -Christine Pang
Hyperlink to peer review of my proposal: Peer review of Christine’s proposal