To: Jasmin Senghera
From: Madeleine Leroux
Date: March 4, 2019
Subject: You Attitude Peer Review Memo
Introduction
The introduction was concise and straightforward. It successfully introduces the purpose of the assignment.
Best Practices
The guidelines were very informative and related to the errors in Evan’s original email. Each guideline also had an action with an effect, which made it very easy to understand they purpose of each tip. While the tips were very informative, reducing the length of some bullet points would require less scrolling left to right to read. Including a suggestion to avoid chat speak or informal abbreviations would also be helpful for Evan.
Conclusion
The ending provided contact information in a friendly manner. The positive encouragement for Evan was a great way to end the memo.
Grammar
There were no problems with grammar, and the memo was easy to read. I did find this sentence: “As you are soon to be graduating”, to be a little awkwardly phrased.
Writing Style
Imperatives were successfully avoided. The use of the pronoun “us” felt very inclusive.
Organization
Each section was clearly labelled and visually delineated.
Conclusion
The memo is an excellent example of a memo written with a “you” attitude in mind. Please email me at madeleinemleroux@gmail.com if you have any questions.
Enclosure: Jasmin’s Memo
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