To: Tameen Imran,
From: Connor Runnalls
Date: November 24, 2019
Subject: Peer Review on Writing with “You” Attitude – Tameen Imran
Great job with this assignment. There is evident thought and effort being placed into your writing. Especially with regards to the implementation of the You Attitude. There are a few small details to consider adding which are noted below. Otherwise, it is a fantastic piece.
First Impressions
The memo is clear, organized, and to the point, with strong suggestions that vary in nature.
The Use of You Attitude
– The memo contains strong points for incorporating the You Attitude.
– Avoid Imperatives
– Perhaps consider adding an example of a correction in imperatives
– Encourage Positivity
– Focus on benefits
– A good example was given in relation to benefits.
Organization of the memo
– Headed by a single title block for suggestions
– Possibly consider adding conclusions for the sake of consistency and organization.
Content of Suggestions
– As mentioned above, strong suggestions were given that pertained to the You Attitude, and professionalism in general.
– There is a clear flow through the suggestions beginning with introductions, and finishing with Evan’s conclusions
Writing components
– The writing is clear and easy to follow.
– Grammar is relatively flawless, though perhaps for consistency, finish each suggestion with a period.
Conclusion
I hope these suggestions may help you with this already great memo. If you have any questions, comments, or concerns, with regards to this review, please don’t hesitate to email me at connor.runnalls@gmail.com
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