MEMORANDUM
To: Erika Paterson, Instructor of ENGL 301
From: Priyanka Patel, Student of ENGL 301
Date: October 11, 2019
Subject: Formal report proposal posted to the team
I am writing to inform you that I have posted my formal report proposal to my team blog as per assignment 2:1. Please find attached a copy of my report proposal here with this email. I have chosen to do this report assignment on preventing Musculoskeletal Disorders (MSD) in Dental Hygienists.
Here is a brief summary of the formal report proposal:
- Introduction of the topic (MSD) and its impact on dental hygienists
- Statement of Problem addressing the need for change
- Proposed solution to prevent MSD
- Scope to address various occupational factors affecting the health of dental hygienists
- Methods to assess ideas for prevention
- My qualifications to support me in this study
- Conclusion to get your approval for this report
This report will focus on identifying key factors that can help prevent work related injuries in dental hygienists to avoid MSD. And I look forward to doing further research with your approval.
Please do not hesitate to contact me at ppatel45@alumni.ubc.ca for further information.
Thank you for taking your time to review my proposal.
Enclosure: 301 Priyanka Patel Formal Report Proposal
November 19, 2019
Hello Priyanka,
Thank you for posting your Progress Report. There are a few of issues. First, your reader(s) need to have the authority to act on the final recommendations – and the assignment instructions request that you name your reader. Please do clarify this for me.
Next, the survey needs a correct ethical introduction, please do review the lesson instructions and the example on the Instructor’s blog and compose a proper introduction.
Next, some questions are too personal.
You need to rephrase these questions so that they are general and not personal.
For example: these questions are too personal:
Do you receive any recognition of your role as a dental hygienist?
Do you receive any recognition of your role as a dental hygienist?
Are your clients able to identify your role as a dental hygienist from dentist and dental assistant in the office?
Does your dentist appreciate your role and partner up to help with prevention?
You want to avoid questions that might lead the respondent to reflect on their personal situations in context with other people. I hope you understand
Please make these changes and alert me with an email with a hyperlink to the page. Thank you.