To: Jason Smith, ENGL301 Student
From: Erfan Ahmed, ENGL301 Student
Date: November 24, 2019
Subject: Peer Review of Writing with You Attitude
Hi Jason,
Attached, you will find my feedback on your email to Evan Crisp regarding tips to communicate effectively with email.
First Impressions:
The email you have written to Evan Crisp is professional and outlines the strengths and weaknesses that are complemented by strategies to improve on writing more effectively to professors.
Organization:
The email is structured efficiently, and the suggestions are separated by bullet points which are brief and informative for the reader to easily understand.
Introduction:
The introduction is brief and precise with what is trying to be conveyed in the body of the memorandum.
Suggestions:
Adding a title for the heading of the assignment, such as “Memorandum” at the top.
Grammar/ Spelling:
When providing an example, the abbreviation ‘ie’ should be written as ‘i.e’. Otherwise, no other major grammatical errors, and your writing has a great flow.
Concluding comments:
Overall, your email memo to Evan was brief and concise with all of the points outlined on how to write more effectively to professors. I hope that the following feedback helps you to enhance your writing. Thanks for taking the time to read my peer review, and should you have any further questions or concerns, please do not hesitate to contact me at erfan@ualberta.ca.
Best regards,
Erfan Ahmed
Link to Jason Smiths Memo on Writing with You Attitude: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99a-2019wa/2019/11/22/memorandum-writing-with-you-attitude-jason-smith/
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