To: Joyce Wu
From: Usman Zahoor
Date: Nov, 24, 2019
Subject: Peer Review of Memo to Evan Crisp
I have reviewed your memo to Evan Crisp and thought it was very well written and concise. I only have a few suggestions outlined below:
First Impressions: The first thing that came to my attention was how easy on the eyes it was. It was very well organized and formatted. I also appreciated how you bolded certain sections of your recommendations.
Introduction: Very well done. You avoided using pronouns in an accusatory manner and kept it concise. I might have made this section slightly longer and maybe elaborated on why professional email correspondence is a necessity.
Best Practices for Writing Emails: I thought you explained each suggestion very well. I also thought you were able to capture the essence of Evan’s shortcomings in those six bullet points. I might have broken down some of the bullet points into subsections, such as the second point. It might have made that specific suggestion a bit more easy on the eyes.
Grammar/Typos: I had to comb through your memo with a fine tooth comb to find anything to comment on. My only comment is to maybe add a “:” to the second sentence of your second suggestion. So it would look like this, “some common information professors look for when they receive email requests from students are: student name, student number, course number, section number and type of request”.
Conclusion: It was concise, to the point, and professional.
This was very well done and it took a lot of time for me to actually find any issues. I hope you found these suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please don’t hesitate to reach me at email@example.com.
Link to Joyce’s Post: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99a-2019wa/2019/11/22/memo-to-evan-crisp-joyce-wu/