Avoid the Negative

Always ‘avoid the negative’ when writing proposals; stress positive outcomes rather than negative situations

Here is an example: negative

 With the rise in employees and with the lack of an organized HR information systems and management in place, it is expected that delivering quality care for employees would be neglected as well as employee management would be more difficult to practice. 

Rewrite: positive

 With the rise in employees the need for well-organized HR information systems and management teams increases and the ability to continue to deliver quality care for employees and management will depend on implementing new and more efficient systems.

Example: negative

If we fail to act now to increase awareness of roller derby and encourage the involvement of new skaters, our league will not be able to maintain the number of skaters necessary for survival.

Rewrite: positive

If we act now to increase awareness of roller derby and encourage the involvement of new skaters, our league will be able to maintain the number of skaters necessary for survival.

Example: negative

” If the attendance of the events continues to decrease, networking will be more difficult, and both the individuals who do and do not attend will feel the effects. Additionally, sponsorship for events will decline since sponsors analyze numbers of attendees to determine how big of a contribution to sponsor.”

Rewrite: positive

If the attendance of the events increases, networking will become easier and everyone will feel this positive impact. Additionally, sponsorship for events will increase as sponsors determine contributions based on attendance numbers.

 

And please remember; professional writers are writing for busy people.

Always avoid the negative when writing survey questions.

Example:

• Have you even been unable to find an item in a timely manner?
• Rewrite: Are you able to find items in a timely manner?

Turning the negative into the positive:

Negative:  A decrease of events and marketing, fewer students are inspired to participate in club activities and in turn, a decrease in interest for the role law has in societal problems.

Positive: An increase of events and marketing will inspire more student participation and in turn an increased interest for the role of law in correcting societal problems

Negative: In addition to this, the UBC Law and Society Chats club is given a healthy budget that could be utilized with more efficacy.  The ample amount of funds that the AMS supplies us with at the beginning of the year may not be available to the club if the membership numbers do not reach a fuller potential.

Positive: In addition, the Club’s budget will not only be used more efficiently, maintaining a healthy membership is essential for keeping the budget.

Negative: “Low student turn-out at varsity games means that the athletic department does not generate revenue from the games. This also negatively affects the perception of UBC as a school with low school spirit.

Positive: Increasing student turn-out will increase income for the athletic department and positively impact school spirit.

And please remember; professional writers are writing for busy people.