Peer Review for Michaela’s Memorandum to Evan Crisp

To:             Michaela Basciano, English 301 Student Writer

From:       Eva Ruiz, English 301 Student Reviewer

Date:          July 23, 2020

Subject:     Peer Review of Writing with You Attitude and Memo to Evan Crisp

Thanks for submitting the memorandum to Evan Crisp for review in such a timely manner. After reading the document it is clear the effort made to make the document as concise as possible. 

First Impressions

The document was well organized and presented the information in a very comprehensible way. The bulleted list of advice encapsulated the YOU attitude while giving specific examples in a friendly tone. 

Organization

• The document contained a brief introduction that included the audience, Evan Crisp, and purpose, a bulleted list of suggestions. 
• The bulleted list made good use of bolding to draw attention to the key message of each piece of advice.
• Conclusion was short and to the point. 

Writing Style and Expression

• The YOU attitude was present throughout the entire document, especially in the bulleted list.
• You was only present in the introduction and conclusion. 
• Advice demonstrated ways to improve Evan Crisps email in a positive and constructive tone. 
  • Excellent way of keeping attention on the document at hand while avoiding any personal criticism. 

Grammar and Spelling

The document was well edited as it contained no apparent grammar or spelling mistakes. 

• Consider removing the “(s)” at the end of request in the introduction, as it isn’t necessary. 
• Change “of the same context” in the bulleted list to “with similar requests” to read more smoothly.

Content

Every element of the Memorandum was present in the document. The formatting, introduction, bulleted list, and the conclusion fulfilled the requirements of assignment 3:1. 

Concluding Comments

This document not only encapsulated the spirit of the YOU attitude but did so in a positive and constructive manner. Below is a summary of the suggestions made to perfect this document.

•  Removing “(s)” in the introduction 
• Consider switching  “of the same context” to “with similar requests” in the bulleted list

Please reach out to me if you have any questions regarding my review at evabelen1100@gmail.com. 

 

Michaela’s Memo to Evan Crisp