To: Genevieve Bolduc, Eng 301 student
From: Siddhartha Gupta, Eng 301 reviewer
Date: July 22nd, 2020
Subject: Peer Review Memo to Evan Crisp
Appreciate you sending your memo, I hope these suggestions help in strengthening your memo.
First Impressions:
The information in this memo was excellent, the bullet points summed up the best practices very well. However, the memo could improve its “You” attitude.
Organization:
- The heading was an excellent choice, helped reiterate the message of the memo as well as improving readability
- The bullet points organize the points in an effective and concise manner.
Content:
- Effective practices for increasing chances of emails being read.
- Repetition of themes of respect helped send the message better. Great job.
Voice:
- Great use of specific vocabulary to help create an excellent formal and professional tone.
YOU Attitude:
- More emphasis could have been placed on the benefit to the recipient.
- This could be achieved by changing the “with a professor” (Paragraph 1, Line 2) to “with your professor”
- On the other less emphasis on “You” when speaking of mistakes to avoid hurting the recipient’s ego.
- Changing “filter your email as junk mail.” (Paragraph 2 Line 2) to “filter any email as junk mail.”
Grammar and Typos:
- Did not find any typos or grammar mistakes. Excellent job.
Concluding Comments:
Your proposal was excellently written. Other than the need for emphasis on YOU attitude not much needs to be improved.
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