Peer Review for Glen’s Application Package

To: Glen Kavaliunas, ENGL 301 Student

From: Cathy Liu, ENGL 301 Student

Date: August 15, 2020

Subject: Peer Review for Glen’s Application Package

Dear Glen,

Thank you for completing your application package. With the end of the semester approaching, I appreciate your consistent effort for the assignments. Below I have listed suggestions on how to improve on your application package.

First Impressions

Your forum post is nicely laid out with links to the job posting and you correctly cited in MLA as well. You have all the sections needed for this assignment, and at first glance it is incredibly organized and neat. The signature at the end of your letters is a nice touch.

Cover Letter

You correctly followed the lay out as described in the textbook for writing cover letters. It is nicely written and tidy. Your paragraphs also flow nicely one after another, with the information moving from giving necessary information about yourself to your experiences. One suggestion is perhaps including something about building good relationships with others or working well with others, as in the job posting it comments about having good relationships with other people. Another suggestion might be to include your name somewhere early on so the reader can know immediately who submitted this cover letter and resume. Other than the few corrections listed right below, there is not much else that needs to be changed. Good job!

Corrections:

• In your second paragraph, you write “for the past thee years,” which should be changed to three
• Also in the second paragraph, you write “doing monthly books a GST for companies” – I am not quite sure if you are missing a word or perhaps a comma here

Resume

Your resume is well written. You list your experiences in an order that is descending from most recent jobs, but also in terms of relevancy. This is good as it lets your interviewer immediately know you have the experience for the job. The skills you list are also relevant to the job you are applying for. One note here is that the locations under your work experience are a little out of line. Your resume can look even cleaner and neater if they are all aligned to the right. Aside from this, you do not have any spelling or grammatical errors here.

Reference Letters

You correctly follow the lay out of the letter as indicated in the textbook. It is very neat which is appreciated. You include a nice personal note in the second paragraphs which separates each letter. You use a nice, friendly tone in the letter as well.

There does not appear to be any spelling or grammatical errors in this section – well done!

Conclusion

Your job application package draft was overall very well written. Your effort in writing and editing is evident. There are not many changes to suggest, but below is a quick summary of some changes I have suggested:

• In your cover letter, include your name early on for easy recognition
• Including traits about working well with others in your cover letter may be beneficial as it is also noted in the job posting you selected
• Spelling or grammatical errors in your cover letter are listed in the section under ‘Cover Letter’
• Aligning the locations on your resume will provide an even tidier look

Great job completing this assignment. There are not many changes to suggest, but hopefully these will help you polish your package even further.

Link to Glen’s application package post: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-98a-2020sa/2020/08/12/job-application-package-glen-kavaliunas/