Author: Cody Gagnon, ENGL 301 Student
Peer Reviewer: Matthew Shen, ENGL 301 Student
Date: August 15, 2020
Subject: Peer Review of Application Package
Thank you for submitting your application package.
First Impressions:
This is a comprehensive application package that provides evidence of tenured experience and abilities. The formatting is professional and concise. At first glance, a very good impression is conveyed. However, this can be potentially improved with some minor suggestions that have been outlined below:
Cover Letter:
- The cover letter is divided into three paragraphs that highlight various qualities that the job advertisement is seeking.
- Formatting is clean and document can be read easily.
- May want to establish some sort of connection to Stripe to demonstrate why you would like to work at their company specifically. This could be done in several ways, such as differentiating this company to their competitors, speaking about someone who introduced you to the company, etc.
- If a possibility, find the specific hiring manager at Stripe and address them personally.
- Uses examples to illustrate your skillset, discussed applications from your past.
- Some opportunities to remove pronouns and clarify your position in the final paragraph:
-Please call (123) 456-7890 and email my.name@email.com to discuss my suitability for this position.
-As observed on the resume, all requirements of the position are met and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Resume:
- The document is clean and uncluttered. It covers a full page, and the space is used to its maximum advantage.
- The order of listed experiences make logical sense and is relevant to job advertisement.
- Consider an objective section to further target the job advertisement description.
Reference Requests:
- Each letter is well formatted and has a professional tone.
- The letters follow a shared structure with a standardized introduction and conclusion and an individualized body section that outlines the experience with your reference.
- Attached copy of resume and LinkedIn with each request helps the reference remember your expertise and skillset.
Grammar and Typos:
- Very few grammar mistakes are seen
Concluding Statements:
This is a strong application package; it demonstrates your skills and experience and is made specifically for the job advertisement. Your extensive knowledge and experience will be an asset that separates you from other candidates who may be applying to the same job. Here is a summary of the suggestions listed above:
- Removing unnecessary personal pronouns
- Finding specifics about the hiring manager at Stripe and developing other connections to the company
- Considering an objectives section in the resume
Please let me know if you have any questions. Thank you.
Application Package: Cody Gagnon Application Package
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