Peer Review of Writing with Attitude assignment

Date:                                                     July 23, 2020

Peer Reviewer:                                Jiajie Xu

Author:                                                Zainab Rauf Tramboo

Document under review:           Writing with You Attitude Memo to Evan Crisp

 

Hello Zainab,

 

The work that you posted on our team forum gave an excellent demonstration on writing a memo with YOU attitude. Bellowed are some thoughts and suggestions after reviewing your memo:

 

First impression

This is a clear and concise memo with easy-reading information for the reader. The body text is well-structured and fully contains essential elements for a memo. Overall, it looks very professional on providing advices to the reader.

 

Writing style

• Advices have been well-listed in point form, which given a clear and easy-reading structure.
• Themes for each item are being bolded at the beginning of sentences. This basically deepen the impression of central ideas of individual advices by emphasizing them.
• The YOU attitude is being employed and permeated it within the body of the writing.
• Words of “you” and “you’s” are being avoided maximally within the body text of the writing.
• Advices are focusing on providing the implement measures instead of just giving instructions to the reader by using imperative verbs.
• It would be much helpful if detailing the information within some of advices. (such as giving examples on what means a improper use of grammar and vocabulary).
• The ending of the memo leads the reader focus on the positive, which is a good demonstration of employing YOU attitude.

 

Grammar and Tone

The memo does not contain obvious grammatical and spelling errors. The overall tone of the writing is of highly professional and positive, which makes the article being fluent and smooth to read.

 

Conclusion

This is a clear and concise memo with well-demonstrated YOU attitude to the reader. It fully meets the task of the assignment and reflect on your developed writing skills. Further advices based on your writing are showing as below:

• Providing much detailed suggestions in a certain of items.
• Adding examples for further explanation for practice.

 

Wish these suggestions are able to assist you go further on your writing with YOU attitude. Feel free to let me know if you have any further questions and contact me via my email jiajie.xu@hotmail.com