To: Cathy Liu
From: Aran Chang
Date: July 21, 2020
Subject: Peer Review of You Attitude Assignment
Dear Cathy,
You have done a fantastic job in your email memorandum to Evan Crisp! The review below are some tips that may you make choose to apply, to make your next memorandum even better.
Introduction
Writing with a “You Attitude” can be tricky at times. Your introduction refers to yourself twice before addressing the reader. Perhaps, try to start your memo with the person’s name, or provide praise on something they did well on. It is important to make a great first impression on the reader that you are coming from a good place and not attacking them in any way.
Writing Style
Your writing is very well throughout the email, as each point flows from one to the next. The heading is properly labelled and the writing is easy to understand from a quick glance.
Grammar
You have proofread your memorandum well; there are no spelling or grammatical errors, or awkward phrases. Additionally, you did well in using professional but easily understood terminology throughout the email. This makes your memorandum sound friendly and welcoming. Great job!
You Attitude
As stated previously, perhaps, more use of the “You Attitude” in the Introduction would strengthen your memorandum further.
The body of your memorandum is well thought out, as you do not direct each point at the reader, and generalize your points to apply to everyone. Great use of the You Attitude.
Conclusion
You have done very well in displaying how a professional Email should be written while displaying a “You Attitude”! Overall, there is not much improvement I can provide as your memorandum is already strong. I hope what I have suggested will help you in the future. If you have any questions please contact me via email at aran@abasa.ca.
Thank you
Best regards,
Aran Chang
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