To: Glen Kavaliunas, ENGL 301 Student
From: Money Dhaliwal, ENGL 301 Student
Date: July 23, 2020
Subject: Peer Review of Writing with YOU Attitude Memo
Thank for submitting this document for review. After an initial read through, your memo to Evan Crisp appears very well written and a clear YOU-attitude is seen throughout. Following are the observations made after a complete review.
Organization:
The memo is well organized with clear subheadings, bolding and layout of bullet points. The separate headings titled “General ideas” and “Specific ideas” do a good job of structuring the memo. The “general” section gives an overview of the key points while the “specific” section gives actionable advice to the reader.
Content:
All required elements of a memorandum were included in the post. The intro, conclusion, and body were all written with relevance and detail.
Style:
The style is consistent throughout and remains professional while also demonstrating the you-attitude required for this memo. There is minimal use of imperatives in the body which avoids a negative tone. The few places where imperatives could be removed:
- “This is a chance to say why you would like to take the course”
- A possible alternative: “This is a chance to say what stands out in the course”
- “Including your full name…”
- A possible alternative: “Including a full name…”
Grammar:
The memo was very well edited. There are no grammar or spelling mistakes that could be found.
Conclusion:
This document has a great structure with clearly laid out advice. The specific advice given was thoughtful and gave points that could be easily implemented by the reader. It was also presented with minimal imperatives and a professional tone. With a few minor corrections this memo will be even closer to perfection.
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