To: Jie Su (Mandy Su)
From: Sydney Storie
Date: July 8th, 2020
Subject: Peer Review for LinkedIn Profile
Dear Jie,
Welcome to LinkedIn, I am glad we are able to connect. I reviewed your profile and I have added some helpful tips to enhance your LinkedIn profile accordingly.
First Impression
I thoroughly enjoyed reading through your profile and learning about your skills and accomplishments. It is neat to see how much work experience you have working with JavaScript. I found the profile clear, precise, and easy to follow. There was enough information to have a basic understanding of your work experience and your education history.
Content
Profile Picture:
There is an appropriate profile picture, it is recommended to use a clear, professional headshot photo, which you have done.
Headlines:
You have included a relevant headline to your education history. My suggestion would be to enhance the headline to become more personalized. It is rather short, it may be beneficial to add more relevant information such as interest or career-related goal.
Subheadings
You have provided appropriate subheadings such as work experience, education history, volunteer experience, skills, accomplishments, and interests.
Under the subheading work experience, you have included work experience from 2018 to the present. My recommendation would be to add previous work experience before 2018 if it was appropriate to you.
Regarding your volunteer experience, I believe it would be beneficial to provide a brief background on what the ‘Better Moms Club’ is and why you had an interest in working with this club.
I enjoyed reviewing your skills and endorsements. You outline you have great interpersonal skills which are an asset to many employers.
Grammar
There were no grammar mistakes. The summary was appropriate in length. Great job on this part.
Organization
The profile was easy to navigate and was clear to read through. The summary provided relevant information with an appropriate length. I would recommend including more information regarding your volunteer experience, work experience, and your interests.
Overall Comments
It may be beneficial to include your interests in your bio as well as continue to like interests and skills as this will further enhance your profile and let you become more recognized by connections and employers. My last recommendation would be to spend some time to make connections, it appears you only have a few connections, my suggestion would be to add peers from the English 301 98A class as well as friends and co-workers. Overall, I enjoyed reading through your LinkedIn profile. Please review some of the helpful tips for LinkedIn that peers have posted on their team forum, this is a great way to develop skills to enhance your profile.
I hope you found my recommendations helpful. Please do not hesitate to contact me with any questions or concerns. Great job!
Sincerely,
Sydney Storie
Link to Jie Su Profile: https://www.linkedin.com/in/js169/
Link to Peer Review Template: Peer Review Form for LinkedIn
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